(Answered) : Study Following Weak Message Employee Boss List Least Five Weaknesses Revise Eliminate Fla Q31103139

Study the following weak message from an employee to her boss.List at least five weaknesses. Revise to eliminate flabbyexpressions, long lead-ins, there is/there are fillers,trite business expressions, clichés, and buried verbs, and toaddress lack of parallelism, lack of plain English, and otherproblems.

To: Daniel Kalanek <dkalanek@fidelityfirst.com>

From: Cheryl Madzar<cmadzar@fidelityfirst.com>

Subject: My Suggestion

Mr. Kalanek,

Pursuant to the fact that you asked for suggestions on how toimprove customer relations, I am submitting my idea. I am writingyou this message to let you know that I think we can improvecustomer satisfaction easy by making a change in our counters.

Last December glass barriers were installed at our branch.