Study the following weak message from an employee to her boss.List at least five weaknesses. Revise to eliminate flabbyexpressions, long lead-ins, there is/there are fillers,trite business expressions, clichés, and buried verbs, and toaddress lack of parallelism, lack of plain English, and otherproblems.
To: Daniel Kalanek <dkalanek@fidelityfirst.com>
From: Cheryl Madzar<cmadzar@fidelityfirst.com>
Subject: My Suggestion
Mr. Kalanek,
Pursuant to the fact that you asked for suggestions on how toimprove customer relations, I am submitting my idea. I am writingyou this message to let you know that I think we can improvecustomer satisfaction easy by making a change in our counters.
Last December glass barriers were installed at our branch.
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